Friday, January 27, 2017

Martina Kepner





2 comments:

  1. I really like your story it's very catching. The only mistake I see is you space between your periods and spaces where there shouldn't be.Other than that very good job!

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  2. Reading your story really got me intrigued with how intense everything was getting. Your brother saying you "fell" but knowing you were in the hospital had to have made him feel pretty bad for what he actually did do. I wish you would have told your mom what really happened or if you did what happened then? I also wish your brother would have just fessed up to what really happened. Saw very few grammar issues other than that it was a really good story!

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